minespatch Posted September 15, 2017 Share Posted September 15, 2017 Haven't seen the character yet so it'll make sense in context when the character shows up. Nice job with the lighting. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
geni0529 Posted September 15, 2017 Author Share Posted September 15, 2017 (edited) COMIC!!! PART!!!! YAY!!!! Edited September 16, 2017 by geni0529 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mobbstar Posted September 15, 2017 Share Posted September 15, 2017 (edited) Swirly! As for the comic, the font in the last panel is impossible to read. Edited September 15, 2017 by Mobbstar 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
minespatch Posted September 15, 2017 Share Posted September 15, 2017 Kind of hard to see Seth's dialogue in the final panel but glad you got a page out finally. He brought the axe into the house...? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
geni0529 Posted September 15, 2017 Author Share Posted September 15, 2017 37 minutes ago, Mobbstar said: Swirly! As for the comic, the font in the last panel is impossible to read. Ah sorry, it says "You must be seeing things then Emma" 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Starthefox Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 (edited) I can tell you worked hard on the spoilered one. As the others said, it was kinda hard to read Seth's dialogue. Try brightening the color a little when against dark backgrounds. Seth! Why are you keeping axes under couches! Somebody could get murdered! Edited September 16, 2017 by Starthefox Oh, and maybe work on the grammar a bit. It seems a bit flat, with no commas. Good job, though! 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonMage156 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Maybe you can make it a lighter blue. If I make a comic and the background's too dark I ether change the colour of the text or use a coloured text box. Other than that, I like it. Ooh, what are you hiding Seth? Also, nice picture in the spoiler. I'm gonna enjoy reading all about those mages/magic users(?) ^_^ 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
geni0529 Posted September 16, 2017 Author Share Posted September 16, 2017 1 hour ago, Starthefox said: I can tell you worked hard on the spoilered one. As the others said, it was kinda hard to read Seth's dialogue. Try brightening the color a little when against dark backgrounds. Seth! Why are you keeping axes under couches! Somebody could get murdered! Thank you, I really did work hard on that one! I'm actually going to to fix that problem with th text right now so yeah! As for the grammar, I thought I put a comma in there but I was kinda running on coffee so I wouldn't be suprised if I forgot to. 1 hour ago, DragonMage156 said: Maybe you can make it a lighter blue. If I make a comic and the background's too dark I ether change the colour of the text or use a coloured text box. Other than that, I like it. Ooh, what are you hiding Seth? Also, nice picture in the spoiler. I'm gonna enjoy reading all about those mages/magic users(?) ^_^ Thanks! I'm glad it's interesting to you! As I mentioned above I'm fixing that problem right now by making the couch a slightly lighter color :3 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
geni0529 Posted September 16, 2017 Author Share Posted September 16, 2017 Okay! it should be fixed but you guys have to tell me because the original looked fine on my computer so this one might not be good either. Also! heres an art collab I did with one of my best friends jade! She did the lining and I did the coloring! 4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
minespatch Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 Nice work. You did well with the coloring. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonMage156 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 10 minutes ago, geni0529 said: Okay! it should be fixed but you guys have to tell me because the original looked fine on my computer so this one might not be good either. It is but I just noticed a lil mistake in Emma's dialogue. There's no ' in the word "I'll". Sorry for constantly pointing out these things ^^; 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
geni0529 Posted September 16, 2017 Author Share Posted September 16, 2017 1 minute ago, DragonMage156 said: It is but I just noticed a lil mistake in Emma's dialogue. There's no ' in the word "I'll". Sorry for constantly pointing out these things ^^; Darn it you're right. It's a whole process to get that fixed so its not happening right now, but please if you notice any other mistakes tell me cause I write them down and when im done with chapter two ill probably go back and fix all of the grammar mistakes in chapter two. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
geni0529 Posted September 16, 2017 Author Share Posted September 16, 2017 (edited) Hello Hello! Bet you weren't expecting a new comic part! If you cant tell in order to make up for missed time I am going to be posting a part every singe day, and those parts will be comprised on more then one image! Anyway's enjoy and have a nice day! Also, Im re-reading this part and all I can think is "SHUN THE NON-BELEIVER!!!!" Edited September 16, 2017 by geni0529 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonMage156 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 1 hour ago, geni0529 said: "SHUN THE NON-BELEIVER!!!!" (Oh c'mon, you knew that was coming XD ) 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
geni0529 Posted September 16, 2017 Author Share Posted September 16, 2017 3 minutes ago, DragonMage156 said: (Oh c'mon, you knew that was coming XD ) THATS WHERE ITS FROM! I couldn't remember lol. Funny thing actually I can do a really good impression of the blue and pink unicorns Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonMage156 Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 1 hour ago, geni0529 said: THATS WHERE ITS FROM! I couldn't remember lol. Funny thing actually I can do a really good impression of the blue and pink unicorns I wish I could hear it XD 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
minespatch Posted September 16, 2017 Share Posted September 16, 2017 8 hours ago, geni0529 said: THATS WHERE ITS FROM! Charlie the Unicorn. Something tells me Spidena has been hiding a lot of things from her daughter. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
geni0529 Posted September 18, 2017 Author Share Posted September 18, 2017 *Says I'm going to post a comic part everyday* *Watches the entirety of Voltron instead* Anyways, there will be two comic parts today so yeah. Enjoy and have a nice day! 4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
minespatch Posted September 18, 2017 Share Posted September 18, 2017 I feel bad for Seth. You can really tell he's struggling with his situation 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
geni0529 Posted September 19, 2017 Author Share Posted September 19, 2017 THE PART!!!! 4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
minespatch Posted September 19, 2017 Share Posted September 19, 2017 "Don't blow anything up" Uh.... Has that happened before? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DragonMage156 Posted September 19, 2017 Share Posted September 19, 2017 3 minutes ago, minespatch said: "Don't blow anything up" Sounds like me on a good day XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mobbstar Posted September 19, 2017 Share Posted September 19, 2017 Wow. Get found out on a secret and then you don't even get to reveal the implications. Rude. 1 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
geni0529 Posted September 19, 2017 Author Share Posted September 19, 2017 2 hours ago, minespatch said: "Don't blow anything up" Uh.... Has that happened before? Yeah probably multiple times. 2 hours ago, DragonMage156 said: Sounds like me on a good day XD Same. 1 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
geni0529 Posted September 20, 2017 Author Share Posted September 20, 2017 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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