Guys, I need help with Webber Animated narration text

[DST_LSJ]

Here is a link of Webber new Webber Animated Short.

I am a member of the translation team. My task is to translate the narration into Chinese.
Here is the narrator text I got from the youtube. 

Spoiler

 

There was once a young boy who would not hurt a fly.
Living on a small farm underneath the blue sky.
Now this story I warn you is not for free part.
but a sad terrible begain the boy trouble start.
All the boy ever wangted was just be seen.
noticed by his father who never meant to be mean.
He was absorbed in his work no time for play or talk.
And the boy grew to despise the click of that lock.
as the lonely days passed, Jealous thoughts filled his mind.
the boy turned to naughtiness when once he was kind.

So he came up with  a plan to get papa's attention.
And one fateful night he broke into his father's collection.
contraptions treasures and oddities galore.
He tipped over the glass case and it shattered on the floor.
Out gave a spider it gave the bad boy a fright.
eight eye peeled into his soul and brunched.
oh turn away my dear friend. I don't want to see.
for this boy and his spider were not meant to meet.
for that night with one bite they became something new.
a boy and a rock.
Now one no longer two.

these pets screamed and they yelled in fight and the sight.
and chased him away where he got lost in the night.
He was cold and was scared. he vowed he'd be nice.
he begged for a way to change back no matter the price.

Along Came A Spider narration .txt

I don't have the original text, I can only write by listening. 

So I'm here to ask for your help. Could you pls help me correct these texts? THX.

[Pine G]

The subtitles are mostly correct except for some parts:

"This story I warn you is not for those faint of heart"

"Out came a spider..."

"Eight eyes peeled into his soul and it lunged in for a (bite)"

"I don't want you to see"

"A boy and arach" (?)

"Those parents..."

"They yelled in fright at the sight"

[SinancoTheBest]

Most lines are correct, here are some corrections I made on the lines Pinegrove didn't mention or I heard differently:

(4) but our sad tale begins with a boy's troubled stunt.

(5) All the boy ever wanted was just to be seen.

(16) eight eyes peeled into his soul and plunged in for a ...

(17) for this boy and this spider were not meant to meet. 

(19) a boy and arach (just to confirm he indeed says arach, not "a rock" xD)

(21) his parents screamed and they yelled in fright at the sight. 

[DaZoul]

1 hour ago, SinancoTheBest said:

but our sad tale begins with a boy's troubled stunt.

I actually heard "troubled start"

I don't know, it just makes more sense for me.

Listening to it again, I'm pretty sure it's "start"

[SinancoTheBest]

2 hours ago, DaZoul said:

I actually heard "troubled start"

I don't know, it just makes more sense for me.

Listening to it again, I'm pretty sure it's "start"

Idk, guess both works, I asked the discord crowd and they unanimously said stunt.  Stunt makes more sense to me as referring to the mischief of pushing the cage. Start is kinda weird to be because why would the tragic events led to the transformation of him would be THE BOY's start". If anything, it's his end as one being.

[DST_LSJ]

New view

Spoiler

Along Came A Spider 
从前有一只蜘蛛

There was once a young boy who would nothurt a fly,
Living on a small farm underneath the bluesky.
曾经有一个心地善良的小男孩，居住在一个清新的小农场里。

Now this story I warn you is not for thosefaint of heart,
For our sad tale begins with a boy’s trouble’s start.
若你胆子很小，我劝你这个故事还是不要听为妙。
这一切都要从小伙惹上的麻烦开始说起。

All the boy ever wanted was just be seen,
Noticed by his father who never meant to bemean.
孩子使出了浑身解数想引起父亲的主意。
但是他的父亲总是对他不予理睬。

He was absorbed in his work no time forplay or talk,
And the boy grew to despise the click ofthat lock.
他的父亲光顾着工作，没空光顾他。
那个男孩心灰意冷，他的眼神穿过锁孔。

As the lonely days passed, jealous thoughtsfilled his mind,
The boy turned to naughtiness when once hewas kind.
嫉妒的种子悄悄埋下，在孤独滋润下逐渐生根发芽。
纯真的孩子变成了熊孩子。

So he came up with a plan to getPapa's attention,
And one fateful night he broke into hisfather's collection.
为了获得父亲更多的关注，他萌生了一个想法。
一个月黑风高的夜晚他闯入了父亲的储藏室。

Contraptions, treasures, and odditiesgalore,
He tipped over the glass case and itshattered on the floor.
或巧夺天工，或奇珍异宝，这里一应俱全。
他推开了玻璃罩，任凭它在地上摔得粉碎。

Out came a spider it gave the bad boy afright,
Eight eye peeled into his soul and it crunchedto and fro…
一只蜘蛛冒了出来吓了这小子一跳。
8只眼睛直视着他的灵魂，一场悲剧在所难免…

Oh turn away my dear friend. I don't wantyou to see,
For this boy and this spider were not meantto meet.
还是回避一下吧我亲爱的朋友，你恐怕不忍心看。
男孩和蜘蛛误打误撞后，紧紧地“缠绕”在了一起。

For that night with one bite they becamesomething new,
A boy and arach, now one no longer two.
它来自那一夜的蜘蛛狠狠的那一口，
男孩与蜘蛛合二为一。
His parents screamed and they yelled infright at the sight,
And chased him away where he got lost inthe night.
他的父母被吓了一大跳，毫不留情地赶走了他。
男孩离开家不久便在夜里迷了路。

He was cold and was scared. he vowed he'dbe nice,
He begged for a way to change back, nomatter the price…
寒冷和恐惧支配着他，他发誓要变得更听话，
他祈求着变回人的方法，无论任何代价…

译. by 八戒，老司饥.

 

[TheGoldenDonut_]

Yes cool animated short.

[thegreatJash]

I wish they did narration more for animated shorts. It really breathes life into the characters. Makes Wortox's and Webber's demise feel that much more tragic.

[minespatch]

8 hours ago, thegreatJash said:

I wish they did narration more for animated shorts. It really breathes life into the characters. Makes Wortox's and Webber's demise feel that much more tragic.

Also, Emmet does a great job. Still confused for why he used a Sean Connery impersonation in the Wortox short.