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https://www.google.ro/amp/m.wikihow.com/Get-Inspiration-for-Poetry%3famp=1?client=safari

(you don't need depression to write poems you need just a little inspiration,if you want to be depressed just look in the mirror if it breaks it means you are ugly and you'll be sad because of that he joking.but really don't give up keep trying dude)

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This next isn't about depression. Or suicide. Or even self-hatred.

This next one's about... my old friend.

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your words as sharp as needles
you held my happiness, thin as string
you could've used your words and my happiness
to keep my heart together
instead your took your words
and stabbed me in the heart

It's over-dramatic, edgy, and doesn't rhyme, I know.

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13 hours ago, Paxtonnnn said:

This next isn't about depression. Or suicide. Or even self-hatred.

This next one's about... my old friend.

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your words as sharp as needles
you held my happiness, thin as string
you could've used your words and my happiness
to keep my heart together
instead your took your words
and stabbed me in the heart

It's over-dramatic, edgy, and doesn't rhyme, I know.

i had no idea that words can stab you.or you mean that they cut the hearth in half?

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22 hours ago, Paxtonnnn said:

This next isn't about depression. Or suicide. Or even self-hatred.

This next one's about... my old friend.

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your words as sharp as needles
you held my happiness, thin as string
you could've used your words and my happiness
to keep my heart together
instead your took your words
and stabbed me in the heart

It's over-dramatic, edgy, and doesn't rhyme, I know.

It's just blank verse. Not bad blank verse. The finish vould be subtler, maybe some onomatopoeia? Perhaps different verification. But it's not a bad thing. In fact it shows promise.

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