spartan1204 Posted July 25, 2013 Author Share Posted July 25, 2013 Critique v.2.0Key:Original text - greyCommentary - (blue)Edits - redGood effort. Keep practicing. Thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
spartan1204 Posted August 7, 2013 Author Share Posted August 7, 2013 If anyone has some ideas to help me improve my story please tell me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
spartan1204 Posted August 9, 2013 Author Share Posted August 9, 2013 Update: I'm almost done with my Maxwell origin story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
spartan1204 Posted September 2, 2013 Author Share Posted September 2, 2013 (edited) I find it sad that the majority of this forum is me commenting about the updates for my story, forever alone To tell ya the truth, I went the easy way out with Wendy's personality change because I couldn't think of a good transition Edited September 2, 2013 by spartan1204 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
spartan1204 Posted September 19, 2013 Author Share Posted September 19, 2013 I think I'm finished with this story, if there are things that I should add or need to fix let me know Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Letter W Posted September 19, 2013 Share Posted September 19, 2013 I like the direction this is going. Unfortunately I'm a bit of a shoddy writer so I can't offer much critique. Your imagery was quite good though, I thought. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
spartan1204 Posted October 5, 2013 Author Share Posted October 5, 2013 I like the direction this is going. Unfortunately I'm a bit of a shoddy writer so I can't offer much critique. Your imagery was quite good though, I thought. Thank you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
spartan1204 Posted February 11, 2014 Author Share Posted February 11, 2014 Wow, I haven't been on these forums for a while now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Enderjim Posted November 3, 2020 Share Posted November 3, 2020 (edited) i really liked te story except of the end. I dont think maxwell would erase her memories and change her and i think this happened along the way. i also think that because of her character update some things have changed and that you should point out somehow that maxwell is wendys uncle now that it is confirmed. but i leave that to you. good job again hope u take my comment into consideration Edited November 3, 2020 by Enderjim Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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